Title: Moon sinks

[swirlsofpurple]

Moon sinks, come awake,
With bars blurry in mind, still half-man half beast,
An unthinking thing, like waking dream, sleepwalks,
In mind’s eye,
Reach for coherence- fail,
Growl or swear or something in-between,
Teeth too big for mouth.

She shakes off the last vestiges of her transformation,
Aware of her nakedness once more- she clothes herself,
Sluggishly,
The beast sits at the root of her skull still,
Scratch-scratching her brain-stem like ghosts,
She wants to scream,
Clambers noisily around the kitchen instead,
Banging cupboard doors, slamming pots onto the counter,
Coffee.

The sun pours warm into the room,
She sinks back into herself,
Only an animal in the way humans are,
The day slides by, back to evening,
The thought-stealing blanket encroaches,
She tries to just let it come, violently,
Moon rises, sleep.

Comments

[beldarzfixon.livejournal.com]

Nice imagry

[swirlsofblue.livejournal.com]

Thank you :)

[bleodswean.livejournal.com]

WHOA!! I love this, J! I love the dual nature of it, I love how it replies to the prompt, and I love how it teases several different images in one! Great work!

[swirlsofblue.livejournal.com]

Thank you, so glad you liked this interp of the prompt :)

[roina-arwen.livejournal.com]

This is my favorite part:
The beast sits at the root of her skull still,
Scratch-scratching her brain-stem like ghosts,
She wants to scream,

Very evocative writing.

[swirlsofblue.livejournal.com]

Thank you, so glad you liked that part :)

[beautyofgrey.livejournal.com]

This is really quite lovely, and your reading of it is fantastic.

I think my favorite bit is: The sun pours warm into the room / She sinks back into herself/ Only an animal in the way humans are

[swirlsofblue.livejournal.com]

Thank you, so glad you liked that line :)

[stellinasusan.livejournal.com]

Great piece of imagery,well done x

[swirlsofblue.livejournal.com]

Thank you, glad you liked the imagery :)

[engarian.livejournal.com]

I think I've known a few people like this - LOL.

- Erulisse (one L)

[swirlsofblue.livejournal.com]

:)

[viagra.livejournal.com]

I liked this a lot! My favorite part is probably the line that's simply "Coffee."

It perfectly evokes that feeling of coffee bliss, when you're bleary-eyed and grumpy and then you take a sip and just... chill. Good work :)

[swirlsofblue.livejournal.com]

Thank you, so glad you liked that coffee line, I was hoping it would work like that :)

[mollywheezy.livejournal.com]

Excellent imagery! Well done!

[swirlsofblue.livejournal.com]

Thank you, glad you liked the imagery :)

[d0gs.livejournal.com]

this imagery is amazing. i love this so very much

[swirlsofblue.livejournal.com]

Thank you, glad you liked the imagery :)

[tonithegreat.livejournal.com]

I like the use of the fantastical in your poem. Morgenmuffel sounds like a wolfish word to me, too! Well done.

[swirlsofblue.livejournal.com]

Thank you, glad you liked the use of the fantastical :)