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He lies in bed, unmoving,

From some inexplicable, intangible force,

There is no energy,

Rising is gargantuan, impossible,

Irreconcilable weight.

There is despair, only.

He stares at the pill bottle, unopened.

 

His stomach rumbles, empty,

The pots and pans, unwashed,

There is no dish-soap,

He opens the pill bottle, considers,

And closes it again, unused.

Maybe he’ll try tomorrow, anew.

He says this every day.

 

He picks up a pill, swallows,

There is no revelation, no epiphany,

He washes a fork,

And opens a can of sweetcorn,

This is something, enough.

It has to be enough, today.

He carries on.

Date: 2022-05-10 10:11 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] erulissedances
Oh my, clear and concise and depressing. Well done.

- Erulisse (one L)

Date: 2022-05-11 11:46 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] adoptedwriter
So sad...Well told. Hugs...

Date: 2022-05-11 05:22 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] bleodswean
Aargh. This is too stripped down, too brutal. Great work, J.

Date: 2022-05-12 01:14 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] ofearthandstars
How clearly you capture this malaise, and yet, as in your title, it is enough to survive and carry through it. I like the way the sparseness of your language and word choice helps to set the tone.

Date: 2022-05-13 12:27 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] drippedonpaper
Wow, the phrase "It has to be enough today."

That is so true.

I really hope your character in the poem can find the light again.

Such a short poem and you already got me to care about him!

Great job.

Date: 2022-05-13 03:29 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] banana_galaxy
I like the progression that is made through the different verses. Depression is a real bear, so any minor progress, as shown here, is a big deal.

Date: 2022-05-15 08:22 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] mollywheezy
Wow. You've expressed so much in so few words. Well done!

Date: 2022-05-15 11:38 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] alycewilson
Sometimes all you can do is carry on. A very vivid depiction of depression.

Date: 2022-05-16 09:36 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] dadi
This rings true and painful!

Date: 2022-05-16 02:49 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] itismeangied
Wow, I felt this

Date: 2022-05-17 08:21 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] gunwithoutmusic
Well done! I like the bittersweet hopefulness of the last stanza. It makes me wonder whether he'll continue taking the pills or whether he'll decide not to take them because there was no big revelation. But you leave me feeling hopeful here, that things will turn out okay.
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