Title: Enough

[swirlsofpurple]

 

He lies in bed, unmoving,

From some inexplicable, intangible force,

There is no energy,

Rising is gargantuan, impossible,

Irreconcilable weight.

There is despair, only.

He stares at the pill bottle, unopened.

 

His stomach rumbles, empty,

The pots and pans, unwashed,

There is no dish-soap,

He opens the pill bottle, considers,

And closes it again, unused.

Maybe he’ll try tomorrow, anew.

He says this every day.

 

He picks up a pill, swallows,

There is no revelation, no epiphany,

He washes a fork,

And opens a can of sweetcorn,

This is something, enough.

It has to be enough, today.

He carries on.

Comments

[erulissedances]

Oh my, clear and concise and depressing. Well done.

- Erulisse (one L)

[swirlsofpurple]

Thank you :)

[adoptedwriter]

So sad...Well told. Hugs...

[swirlsofpurple]

Thank you *hugs*

[bleodswean]

Aargh. This is too stripped down, too brutal. Great work, J.

[swirlsofpurple]

Thank you :)

[ofearthandstars]

How clearly you capture this malaise, and yet, as in your title, it is enough to survive and carry through it. I like the way the sparseness of your language and word choice helps to set the tone.

[swirlsofpurple]

Thank you, glad you liked the way the tone was set :)

[drippedonpaper]

Wow, the phrase "It has to be enough today."

That is so true.

I really hope your character in the poem can find the light again.

Such a short poem and you already got me to care about him!

Great job.

[swirlsofpurple]

Thank you, glad it made you care about him :)

[banana_galaxy]

I like the progression that is made through the different verses. Depression is a real bear, so any minor progress, as shown here, is a big deal.

[swirlsofpurple]

Yes, exactly

Thank you :)

[mollywheezy]

Wow. You've expressed so much in so few words. Well done!

[swirlsofpurple]

Thank you :)

[alycewilson]

Sometimes all you can do is carry on. A very vivid depiction of depression.

[swirlsofpurple]

True. Thank you :)

[dadi]

This rings true and painful!

[swirlsofpurple]

Thank you

[itismeangied]

Wow, I felt this

[swirlsofpurple]

Thank you

[gunwithoutmusic]

Well done! I like the bittersweet hopefulness of the last stanza. It makes me wonder whether he'll continue taking the pills or whether he'll decide not to take them because there was no big revelation. But you leave me feeling hopeful here, that things will turn out okay.

[swirlsofpurple]

Yes, anything is possible, thank you :)